I’ve always wondered why sandman has a picture of Hartley as his avatar while Hartley doesn’t have an avatar.
couldn’t sleep at all last night…
And yeah, the russian porn site theme is not the best color scheme for this story so far so you’ll have to put some sex into the second chapter preferably with pics.
I like how you structured the chapter to be really boring at the beginning, ordinarily boring in the middle and then slightly titillating at the end with the flat-chested bit and then it ends, leaving the reader slightly disappointed and still waiting for the sex. If you do that with every chapter, people will come back for more.
‘always leave your reader hanging’ ~ anonymous author in ‘How to Write a Best Seller even if you’re illiterate’.